MusicalThe Michael Whalen Musical Story Challenge
The Trouble With Beautiful Girls
A tribute to the songs of Van Halen
Jamie always liked beautiful girls. Even back in elementary school, in 1984, he found himself with a crush. He was hot for teacher. She was the woman of his dreams. Better than the ice cream man.
Jump ahead a few years and that little dreamer hooked up with a girl gone bad. He was on top of the world, because this used to be Jimmy’s girl and he always liked to top Jimmy.
Little did he know she loved to runaround. Not just Jimmy, but everybody wants some pretty woman with drop dead legs around them.
She, however, wanted the best of both worlds.
“Oh, I feel your love tonight,” she cooed, “Tell me I’m the one.”
Though he was running with the devil, right now he didn’t care. But he also knew she was not enough.
“Ain’t talkin’ ‘bout love,” Jamie said.
“I’m the one” she said, “When it’s love, it’s love.”
Humans being human, after a little Spanish fly, the day came when she had to tell them the news. He went into a full-scale eruption.
“I’ll wait and see if it is mine,” he said.
Daddy was from the Mean Street and Daddy wasn’t having it. Before he knew what was coming, Jimmy was black and blue.
“Finish what ya started,” Daddy bellowed, “You really got me mad.”
“Somebody get me a doctor,” Jamie weakly pleaded.
These days Jamie’s crying in his beer in the house of pain they created. No longer a life unchained. No longer are they on fire and dancing in the streets. Instead they eat pasta and poundcake, and the cradle will rock…back and forth and back and forth.
It’s not what Jamie dreamed. He dreams of a life on the beach in a hut in Panama where his true love walks in.
EDDIE VAN HALEN YOUR MUSIC REMAINS WITH US. MAY YOU REST IN PEACE.
(A haiku, Michael!)
This is a prompt by the great Michael Whalen. It’s a fun challenge. Give it a whirl.
I believe based on the Michael Whalen Scoring System, I wrote 301 words, with 41 song titles, which I believe is a score of 7.34 words per reference.
For some more musical fun, here is the story that started it all by Melissa Speed.
And a few others who have taken the challenge.
Stephen Dalton with Elton John.
Anu Anniah with Michael Jackson.
And Tracy Stengel was on the same wavelength as me with a tribute to Eddie Van Halen, which I didn’t find out until mine was written. Great minds, thinking alike?
