Hitch Hiker’s Cottage-II And III

Summary

The web content presents a two-part micro-fiction thriller titled "Hitch Hiker’s Cottage-II And III," which details Evan's harrowing experiences in a dark, narrow hallway with a mysterious bleeding wall and ends with a cliffhanger.

Abstract

The "Hitch Hiker’s Cottage" series continues with parts II and III, immersing readers in a suspenseful narrative where the protagonist, Evan, finds himself trapped in a dark tunnel after the only exit disappears. As he navigates through the pitch-black darkness using a lighter, he encounters a narrow hallway with walls covered in disturbing stains and graffiti. In part III, the wall's surface becomes warm and responsive, smearing Evan's hands with fresh blood, and he hears soft moans and detects a familiar scent. The story culminates with the appearance of a shadow on the wall and a flickering lighter, hinting at an unseen presence, and ends with the phrase "To be continued…"

Opinions

The author effectively uses suspense and sensory details to create an eerie atmosphere.
Evan's fear and desperation are palpable, suggesting a psychological battle with an unknown entity.
The use of a cliffhanger at the end of part III builds anticipation and leaves readers with unanswered questions.
The vivid descriptions of the environment and Evan's tactile experiences with the wall contribute to an immersive horror experience.
The story may imply a supernatural element given the inexplicable phenomena Evan encounters.

That door, the only exit was gone.

Evan froze in shock and horror.

The pitch-black darkness around him, engulfed his courage. He reached for a lighter in his blazer.

As far as its bleak illumination reached, he saw a long, seemingly endless hallway, too narrow, and straight like a tunnel.

Evan lurched forward. With each footstep, his heart thudded louder and louder.

The pale-yellow wall was mottled with brown stains, and smeared with drawings and writings.

He ran his hand over that cold endless wall hoping to find a door concealed beneath its filth and madness.

Evan froze when he felt warmth on that crazy wall.

While he gently rubbed its surface to feel it’s true form, soft moans of pleasure entrapped his ears.

That familiar scent of his hitch-hiker, strong and sweet ensnared his nostrils.

Blood, fresh and red smeared his palms. Panic stirred in his chest, nearly choking him.

Yet! Leaning against the bleeding wall, Evan spoke softly in his quivering voice, “Is anybody here? Can you hear me?”

He was heard.

The chandelier hung from the thick wooden rafters started to swing. His lighter flickered.

A gloomy shadow appeared on the wall.

To be continued…

Chirag @ 2020

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