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Summary

The narrative follows an individual's transformation from a person constrained by societal expectations to one who defies them, culminating in a fantastical moment of walking on water.

Abstract

The protagonist of the story grapples with societal pressures and criticisms regarding their appearance and behavior, leading to a crisis of self-identity. After a personal rebirth, they reject the need for external validation and embrace their true self, ultimately demonstrating their empowerment by literally walking on water, leaving onlookers in awe and fear. This act of defiance and self-acceptance silences the judgmental whispers and solidifies the protagonist's newfound confidence and freedom.

Opinions

  • The protagonist initially feels compelled to conform to societal norms to avoid negative judgment.
  • The character's internal dialogue reveals a struggle with self-worth and the desire to please others.
  • The transformation is symbolized by the protagonist's ability to walk on water, indicating a transcendence above petty criticisms.
  • The story suggests that the opinions of others can be damaging and that personal empowerment comes from within.
  • The narrative implies that the fear of being misunderstood or judged is a common human experience.
  • The protagonist's final act is a powerful statement against the culture of gossip and the toxicity of unsolicited opinions.
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MICROFICTION | PROMPT

Walking on Water

You can never please them, so why hide?

“Why is your hair short like a boy?”

“Why are you wearing a long checkered dress to a pool party?”

I don’t want them to think I’m asking for the wrong kind of attention.

That was one version of me, boring, shy, and a downer. Their words cut through my papery skin and constructed a permanent shard in my heart.

When I received an opportunity to start over, I grabbed it by the reins and constructed a new me, cell by cell. I was reborn from ashes and dust.

Did you see her skirt last night? Such a shameless flirt.

She’s so loud. I can’t tolerate one more second of her.

He’s just using you, you know. He’ll trade up soon enough.

Whispers swirled in the air and caught my ears every day. I erected dams to block them, but someone always shared, hoping to gain a favor in return.

I asked for my remaining wish. Take me back to the day I transformed.

When I waded into the water, fully clothed, no one noticed. So, I took one step, then another. Taking a second to acclimatize, I weighed my options.

Levitating two inches off the surface, I traversed the length of the pool.

I relished the look on their gaping faces, with eyes about to combust. She stumbled off her perch, and her pretty head hit the tiles with a thump.

No one moved. They were beginning to fear me.

Prompt: Pick a weird stock image, and write a story inspired by it.

Fiction
Transformation
Self Improvement
Journey
Coming Of Age
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