The Dance In The Rain

Summary

Mia, a captive woman, seizes the opportunity to escape when a police officer visits her captor's home, leading to her rescue and a moment of liberation as she dances in the rain.

Abstract

The narrative "The Dance In The Rain" unfolds the harrowing tale of Mia, a woman held captive for six months by a man who controls her every move. Trapped in a cellar, she longs for freedom and human connection, reaching out to the world beyond her bars. A rare act of kindness from her captor, providing her with food and water, is overshadowed by the constant threat of his presence. The arrival of a police officer at the door presents Mia with a chance for freedom. Despite her initial struggle to scream for help, she eventually summons a powerful cry that alerts the police to her plight. As she is rescued, the downpour of rain becomes a symbol of her newfound freedom, and she revels in the joy of her escape, dancing under the sky. The story ends with the author inviting feedback and suggesting readers use their referral link to support more storytelling.

Opinions

The author, Sam Finlayson, likely intends to evoke empathy and suspense through the depiction of Mia's captivity and her desperate bid for freedom.
The narrative suggests that even in the darkest circumstances, hope and the possibility of rescue should never be abandoned.
The story may be interpreted as a critique of the vulnerability of individuals in situations of coercion and control, highlighting the importance of awareness and intervention.
The inclusion of a referral link for membership indicates the author's desire for reader engagement and support for their continued writing endeavors.
The mention of reading more of the author's work implies a confidence in the quality and impact of their storytelling, hoping to cultivate a loyal readership.

Short story time.

She climbs up on the box to peer out the bars in her window. Staring at the shoes of the people as they rush by, always busy, never stopping.

No one knows she's there, watching, hoping for someone to see her frightened eyes. Her arms reach for the outside to catch a foot or trouser leg. She hears a rattling of the door, multiple locks being opened.

Jumping down, she moves to the tattered mattress and sits down. Her head bowed as he comes through the door.

‘Mia’ he barks, her head rises with her eyes tight shut. ‘open your eyes’. Mia opens her eyes, tears forming, threatening to pour down her face.

He throws a sandwich and a bottle of water at her. It is the most food she has had in the 6 months he has had her, the baby changing everything. Almost everything.

The doorbell shatters the silence, startling her captor ‘do not make a sound’ he hisses. Mia tries to listen to the muffled conversation and creeps closer to the door.

It’s open, isn’t it; she moves a step closer and feels a breeze from the gap. Dare she open the door and try to escape she can still hear the voices at the door.

Grabbing the door handle, she opens it wide, unsure of the layout. She had woken up in that cellar after taking a bottle of water from her Uber driver.

She tiptoes towards the voice, eyes adjusting to the light. As she gets nearer, she sees the person at the door has a uniform. She opens her mouth to scream nothing comes out. Panicked, she tries again, but nothing. Taking a deep breath, she opens her mouth.

The scream that fills the air is like a loud siren going off. Now started, she will never stop. He runs from the door, desperate to get her to shut up, the front door crashes open. The police burst in, dragging him to the ground and pulling her to safety.

They take her outside, looking up into the night sky, the heavens open. She starts laughing, dancing in the rain because she finally could.

Took a run at it would love to know what you think Ellie Jacobson and Jonathon Sawyer

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