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ne, smoke a cigarette/joint. Round 2.²⁵</p><h1 id="44c4">Feedback</h1><p id="0098"><i>The following comments are given both with regards to storytelling and the setting of a sexual scenario. The words ‘reader’ and ‘partner’ can be used interchangeably.</i></p><p id="081f">Dear Jesper. While I applaud your eagerness as well as your attempt and the courage to send this in the first place, I can’t give your story a passing grade. Not only do you fail to deliver a clear storyline, but the scenario is utterly nonsensical and actions are thrown in randomly, without much forethought.</p><p id="d0bc">Instead of teasing and intriguing me as your reader, you confuse and distract me, leaving me turned off and unfulfilled.</p><h2 id="f722">Take charge!</h2><p id="1f5a">As the author of this story, you’re expected to lead and guide your reader. Instead, you use the words ‘maybe’, and ‘if’ multiple times, leaving the action open to interpretation.</p><p id="1b2d">I understand that this is foreign to you and that your intention is likely to apply caution and not push your reader into something they’re not up for. While I appreciate your concerns regarding consent, I must point out that the reader has already given you permission to tell me <i>your</i> story the way <i>you</i> see it.</p><p id="bdb4">Assume that limits and boundaries have already been established and that you’re free to take charge. Be confident and descriptive; paint your story how you imagine it. This will make your reader feel confident in you and your storytelling abilities.</p><h2 id="d60f">Flesh out individual actions</h2><p id="8173">You clearly have some interesting ideas, and you’re open to exploring, but you need to work on arranging these in a way that makes sense to your reader.</p><p id="15ec">There’s no need to use all of your ideas in one story. Focus on a few interesting details and flesh them out, rather than pulling all of your tricks out of the bag at once—it gets messy and confusing! You could, for example, write an entire story about what you do to your reader while they’re tied to the chair, rather than wasting such a wonderful idea by making nothing out of it.</p><h2 id="5860">Take inspiration from other storytellers</h2><p id="ac4e">Think about your favorite books or movies and let yourself be inspired; take a look at how they build up the action to create suspense before they reach climax.</p><p id="fb7d">Further, look at how good storytellers tie different elements together in a way that captures and guides their audience through a journey, before landing them safely back into reality, in a way that makes them feel safe and cared for.</p><p id="a0cb"><i>Below are direct commentaries to your text:</i></p><h2 id="f4c7">Footnotes and comments</h2><p id="21dd">[1] A decent setup, but <i>permission</i> to what?</p><p id="7b4a">[2] #freethepussy (LOL)</p><p id="71a1">[3] Ok, so far, so good!</p><p id="fe80">[4] Not sure about this, but ok, I get it, you’re asserting your dominance, and being a bit of a tease — all though, I prefer being told what’s happening, not what ‘may-be’ happening.</p><p id="a6cb">[5] Wait, what? First, who calls it a wifebeater? Secondly, wearing just a singlet and nothing else is just as bad as wearing just socks…maybe even worse.</p><p id="1082">[6] I’m confused — You seem confused! First, you assert dominance, then you retract it. Be the author of this scenario and just pull my goddamn hair, and let it be assumed that we’ve already established boundaries beforehand.</p><p id="98d2">[7] Thank you, that’s very generous of you! I was <i>maybe</i> having the munchies after that <i>maybe-hit</i> from that joint.</p><p id="598c">[8] Tit-spanking isn’t really my thing, but I suppose you can’t know that, so I’ll let it pass. But what the hell is up with the dick-spanking? The image of you, naked, wearing only a “wifebeater” swinging your dick around like a whip is something out of a nightmare. Stop it!</p><p id="d59c">[9] I’m confused about the story arch. What was the point of tying me to a chair in the first place? This stuff takes time and patience, from both sides, so if you plan on tying someone up, do something with it. You didn’t explore this concept enough that it was worth mentioning in the first place.</p><p id="6dae">[10] Please, be more specific. I’m talking dirty? You’re the author here, tell me what I’m saying.</p><p id="4b0c">[11] Maybe you do,

Options

maybe you don’t. Again, this is your story and you decide what happens. Make up your mind and be assertive.</p><p id="390b">[12] See above. Whether or not I’m in the mood is up to you. This is too vague, I’m lost.</p><p id="1a8d">[13] If you say ‘maybe’ one more time, I’ll scream!</p><p id="6d7a">And you tie me up again? Are you sure? I hope you do something sensible with it this time.</p><p id="b335">[14] Seriously, what is UP with this dick spanking? Is it some porn-thing I’m not familiar with? I’m so turned off by this visual, I can’t even…</p><p id="daf4">[15] Even though I do like spanking and even light degradation, but a full-body spanking — with your dick — while calling me your bitch? I don’t know…</p><p id="7bc9">You didn’t build up to this, so the whole thing feels out of place. If I wasn’t (maybe) tied up, I’d run for my life!</p><p id="55dd">[16] How do you pretend to fuck someone? I’m so confused!</p><p id="2e42">[17] Drop the ‘as you like it’ part. This is your fantasy, and in real life we’d discuss limits before.</p><p id="59c9">[18] I see. We’re attempting a bit of 69-action. I’m concerned about how this works when I’m (maybe) tied up. But then again, perhaps I’m not. Who knows?</p><p id="4a1a">[19] This is such a copout. Don’t be lazy. Describe the ‘extra kinky shit’. I’m your reader, not your mind reader.</p><p id="62cf">[20] Ok, I give up… [eyeroll]</p><p id="d8ee">[21] Hold up! You’re tying me some more? Wasn’t I already (maybe) tied up? You have no clue what you’re doing with ropes, do you?</p><p id="9405">[22] And how is that?</p><p id="3921">[23] AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII!!!!!! (I told you I’d scream.)</p><p id="d961">[24] Wait! I didn’t cum though. Or <i>maybe</i> I did, when you <i>maybe licked me</i> before.</p><p id="4940">I’m not sure and I don’t care anymore. I’m just really glad this whole thing is over.</p><p id="afcf">[25] Nope, we don’t! There’ll be no cuddling and definitely no ‘round 2’. I’m absolutely mortified and I need time to process all of this. Now, hand me that wine and get outta here!</p><p id="9784">I hope this was useful feedback, and I hope you find it beneficial as you continue your adventures in both storytelling and sex. I wrote <a href="https://readmedium.com/the-good-bad-girl-and-the-bad-good-guy-16ec9c610459">my version of a sweet D/s scenario here</a>, perhaps you’ll find it inspirational as well.</p><p id="7934">All the best,</p><figure id="5ca7"><img src="https://cdn-images-1.readmedium.com/v2/resize:fit:800/1*xKxnwqn_EUaHXW-qvkscVQ.png"><figcaption></figcaption></figure><div id="9d6c" class="link-block"> <a href="https://readmedium.com/the-good-bad-girl-and-the-bad-good-guy-16ec9c610459"> <div> <div> <h2>The Good-Bad Girl and the Bad-Good Guy</h2> <div><h3>What I sexted as a response to the worst fantasy ever</h3></div> <div><p>medium.com</p></div> </div> <div> <div style="background-image: url(https://miro.readmedium.com/v2/resize:fit:320/1*SYB0Noc9VlK5dCvo2Cl57w.jpeg)"></div> </div> </div> </a> </div><p id="fac4">A couple of other sex stories for inspiration:</p><div id="727a" class="link-block"> <a href="https://readmedium.com/i-posed-nude-for-an-artist-on-our-first-date-4ec2816aa977"> <div> <div> <h2>I Posed Nude for an Artist on our First Date</h2> <div><h3>“Draw me like one of your French girls”</h3></div> <div><p>medium.com</p></div> </div> <div> <div style="background-image: url(https://miro.readmedium.com/v2/resize:fit:320/1*RrFWFaqwDUNOpOnnDy7_tQ.jpeg)"></div> </div> </div> </a> </div><div id="7a80" class="link-block"> <a href="https://readmedium.com/do-you-squirt-d0c839298df7"> <div> <div> <h2>Do You Squirt?</h2> <div><h3>The story of how I found out</h3></div> <div><p>medium.com</p></div> </div> <div> <div style="background-image: url(https://miro.readmedium.com/v2/resize:fit:320/1*SuaBSXHNbKxTrbSM1ysL6Q.jpeg)"></div> </div> </div> </a> </div></article></body>

The anatomy of sex & storytelling | Part 02

The Best-Worst Fantasy Someone Sent Me

With feedback, comments, and guidance on how to improve your sex/storytelling skills.

Intro

The following story is a slight edit of a fantasy ‘sexted’ to me by a guy I dated briefly. He was unfamiliar with the world of BDSM and powerplay, but after learning that I wasn’t, he got inspired and wanted to send me his own version of a D/s scenario.

I’d agreed to receive the story and had already let him in on a few of my kinks, so I was prepared for something fairly explicit, but nothing could have prepared me for what you’re about to read.

Jesper, which isn’t the guy’s real name, is, contrary to the impression you might get from his story, a very sweet and kind guy. But, a writer or artist, he is not. His past sexual experiences were rather humdrum, so all of this was uncharted territory to him—but because of his eagerness to expand his horizons, I encouraged him.

I’m not using his story to shame him, but rather as a point of conversation about the similarities between sex and storytelling, and how improving our storytelling skills can improve our ability to ‘write’, think up—and act out—more intriguing sex-scenarios as well.

There is an apparent connection between sexual and creative energy, as well as between artistry in life and in the bedroom. Receiving Jesper’s story made this connection all that more obvious to me.

Ok, enough with the disclosures. Here’s his story, with my feedback and comments below:

Warning: hold onto your chair!

Jesper’s story

After a talk and a glass of wine on your balcony, you give me your permission.¹

You’re wearing fishnet stockings and suspenders with heels, but your pussy is free!²

There’s quiet music on. We don’t talk. I tell you to sit down on a chair. I tie your arms to the chair, behind your back. I open your legs by tying your ankles to the chair. I sit in front of you. We’re just having deep eye contact, no talking.³

I take a few hits from a joint, and maybe I’ll let you do the same.⁴

I take my clothes off, but not my wifebeater.⁵ I kiss you, everywhere I want, and pull your hair just as hard as you like it.⁶

Now my dick is hard. I’m spanking your face with my dick. I’ll let you eat my balls.⁷

You suck my dick. I’ll spank your tits with my hand and my dick.⁸ We kiss in-between.

I sit down in front of you. I untie you.⁹ You’re talking dirty to me.¹⁰

I tell you to sit on my face cause I want to eat your pussy. Maybe I lick you until you orgasm, or maybe I stop it.¹¹

If you’re in the mood, you talk dirty.¹²

I tell you when it’s time to go to bed and how I want you lying there. Maybe I tell you to lie on your back and I’ll tie you again.¹³

I’ll spank every part of your body, also with my dick.¹⁴ If I’m in the mood I call you my bitch or talk kinky to you.¹⁵

I pretend to fuck you, but I don’t do it.¹⁶

I put my dick in your mouth as deep as you like it.¹⁷ I’ll eat your pussy while putting my fingers in your ass.¹⁸

I’m sure some extra kinky shit happens too…¹⁹

If you beg me to fuck you, I will.²⁰ I will tie your arms together and your legs.²¹ I will fuck you just the way I want to.²²

There will be a bag in your bedroom with stuff in it. Maybe²³ I will find a ballgag and a little butt plug there. I will use these toys and fuck you again, harder. Now I fuck you in the ass until I cum.²⁴

We take a break, cuddle, drink water and wine, smoke a cigarette/joint. Round 2.²⁵

Feedback

The following comments are given both with regards to storytelling and the setting of a sexual scenario. The words ‘reader’ and ‘partner’ can be used interchangeably.

Dear Jesper. While I applaud your eagerness as well as your attempt and the courage to send this in the first place, I can’t give your story a passing grade. Not only do you fail to deliver a clear storyline, but the scenario is utterly nonsensical and actions are thrown in randomly, without much forethought.

Instead of teasing and intriguing me as your reader, you confuse and distract me, leaving me turned off and unfulfilled.

Take charge!

As the author of this story, you’re expected to lead and guide your reader. Instead, you use the words ‘maybe’, and ‘if’ multiple times, leaving the action open to interpretation.

I understand that this is foreign to you and that your intention is likely to apply caution and not push your reader into something they’re not up for. While I appreciate your concerns regarding consent, I must point out that the reader has already given you permission to tell me your story the way you see it.

Assume that limits and boundaries have already been established and that you’re free to take charge. Be confident and descriptive; paint your story how you imagine it. This will make your reader feel confident in you and your storytelling abilities.

Flesh out individual actions

You clearly have some interesting ideas, and you’re open to exploring, but you need to work on arranging these in a way that makes sense to your reader.

There’s no need to use all of your ideas in one story. Focus on a few interesting details and flesh them out, rather than pulling all of your tricks out of the bag at once—it gets messy and confusing! You could, for example, write an entire story about what you do to your reader while they’re tied to the chair, rather than wasting such a wonderful idea by making nothing out of it.

Take inspiration from other storytellers

Think about your favorite books or movies and let yourself be inspired; take a look at how they build up the action to create suspense before they reach climax.

Further, look at how good storytellers tie different elements together in a way that captures and guides their audience through a journey, before landing them safely back into reality, in a way that makes them feel safe and cared for.

Below are direct commentaries to your text:

Footnotes and comments

[1] A decent setup, but permission to what?

[2] #freethepussy (LOL)

[3] Ok, so far, so good!

[4] Not sure about this, but ok, I get it, you’re asserting your dominance, and being a bit of a tease — all though, I prefer being told what’s happening, not what ‘may-be’ happening.

[5] Wait, what? First, who calls it a wifebeater? Secondly, wearing just a singlet and nothing else is just as bad as wearing just socks…maybe even worse.

[6] I’m confused — You seem confused! First, you assert dominance, then you retract it. Be the author of this scenario and just pull my goddamn hair, and let it be assumed that we’ve already established boundaries beforehand.

[7] Thank you, that’s very generous of you! I was maybe having the munchies after that maybe-hit from that joint.

[8] Tit-spanking isn’t really my thing, but I suppose you can’t know that, so I’ll let it pass. But what the hell is up with the dick-spanking? The image of you, naked, wearing only a “wifebeater” swinging your dick around like a whip is something out of a nightmare. Stop it!

[9] I’m confused about the story arch. What was the point of tying me to a chair in the first place? This stuff takes time and patience, from both sides, so if you plan on tying someone up, do something with it. You didn’t explore this concept enough that it was worth mentioning in the first place.

[10] Please, be more specific. I’m talking dirty? You’re the author here, tell me what I’m saying.

[11] Maybe you do, maybe you don’t. Again, this is your story and you decide what happens. Make up your mind and be assertive.

[12] See above. Whether or not I’m in the mood is up to you. This is too vague, I’m lost.

[13] If you say ‘maybe’ one more time, I’ll scream!

And you tie me up again? Are you sure? I hope you do something sensible with it this time.

[14] Seriously, what is UP with this dick spanking? Is it some porn-thing I’m not familiar with? I’m so turned off by this visual, I can’t even…

[15] Even though I do like spanking and even light degradation, but a full-body spanking — with your dick — while calling me your bitch? I don’t know…

You didn’t build up to this, so the whole thing feels out of place. If I wasn’t (maybe) tied up, I’d run for my life!

[16] How do you pretend to fuck someone? I’m so confused!

[17] Drop the ‘as you like it’ part. This is your fantasy, and in real life we’d discuss limits before.

[18] I see. We’re attempting a bit of 69-action. I’m concerned about how this works when I’m (maybe) tied up. But then again, perhaps I’m not. Who knows?

[19] This is such a copout. Don’t be lazy. Describe the ‘extra kinky shit’. I’m your reader, not your mind reader.

[20] Ok, I give up… [eyeroll]

[21] Hold up! You’re tying me some more? Wasn’t I already (maybe) tied up? You have no clue what you’re doing with ropes, do you?

[22] And how is that?

[23] AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII!!!!!! (I told you I’d scream.)

[24] Wait! I didn’t cum though. Or maybe I did, when you maybe licked me before.

I’m not sure and I don’t care anymore. I’m just really glad this whole thing is over.

[25] Nope, we don’t! There’ll be no cuddling and definitely no ‘round 2’. I’m absolutely mortified and I need time to process all of this. Now, hand me that wine and get outta here!

I hope this was useful feedback, and I hope you find it beneficial as you continue your adventures in both storytelling and sex. I wrote my version of a sweet D/s scenario here, perhaps you’ll find it inspirational as well.

All the best,