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A Great Submission — Part 23 Mysteries Solved!
“Too Many Maids — Too Many Clues — WAY Too Many Words”
Zapology: I’m sorry… I Expanded by way more than 100 words… again. My head is just so full of this stuff and I have to empty it out, before it explodes. I’m ready for my Spanking…
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🕰 One Hour before Part 17…
Ever so cautiously, David peeks out from his hiding spot, getting a perfect up-skirt view of Helen’s lack of panties. Sliding back under the bed, he waits for her to leave.
Running down the hall, hearing the loudest of noises, he finds Brody ass-fucking a Maid so hard, the headboard cracks the drywall, causing a piece of metal to fall out.
To avoid getting caught, David backs into another room, just in time to catch another Maid, soaking the crotch of her panties with chloroform, before hooking up with Dabney.
Scared he’s about to get caught, David heads to the kitchen, and can’t avoid his bad habit of digging in the garbage. Left over salad with raspberry preserves! YUM!
Just as he reaches for it, Chef Pierre sees him and screams, “Piccolo figlio di puttana! Esci dalla mia cucina, cazzo!”
Quickly David runs out of the kitchen and into the ballroom! Pierre is right behind him with a large bowl of raspberry preserves. “Vuoi della confettura di lamponi? Ti regalo la confettura di lamponi!”
Throwing it hard, he misses David, but shatters a vase full of tulips being carried by yet, another Maid! Just how many Maids does Jaya have?
Running into Jaya and her whip, in the hall, he guesses her room may be the only safe place, but he’s wrong. He finds another fucking Maid, who is rummaging through Jaya’s jewelry. Seeing David, she holds a single finger to her lips, so he doesn’t make any noise.
Pierre is in angry Chef mode, still looking for the garbage picker, while, Jaya, Helen, and Anita, are scattered about. David chooses to go back into the kitchen, where he finds Brody, trying to get ketchup out of a stubborn wide-mouthed bottle.
Brody looks for a knife in the silverware drawer, only to find it empty. The Maid, who took the Jewelry, also snagged the silverware on her way out. Remembering he pocketed that odd piece of metal that fell out of the wall, he uses it to reach the ketchup, ignoring the large letter ‘G’ on the middle.
Brody heads out of the kitchen, with ketchup dripping off the ‘G’-key. “What’s up foxes?”
“DROP THE WEAPON! NOW!”
“Whoa! Calm down… oh, it’s dripping. I’m real sorry.”
Confused? Here’s Part 17:
David’s curiosity is just too much, so he navigates his way through the kitchen, to follow Brody into the Ball Room, that’s full of people. The smell of sex is overwhelming, while the smell from the carpeting is even more alluring to David. He has no choice but to lick the edge of the raspberry preserves.
“DON’T ANY OF YOU READ? THE INVITE CLEARLY STATES: NO DOGS!”
Helen moves in to pick up, and protect David, “Stop yelling. He has very sensitive ears.”
Want to start from the beginning of A Great Submission? Here’s your chance:
Say Hi To David. He just loves raspberry preserves!
Where the hell did all these Maids come from?
Zepilogue:
“So… what do you two, my top editing team, think?”
“The premise is a little ruff.”
“What happened to the recipe stuck to David’s paw in Part 17? Why did the Maid want to chloroform Dabney? Where’s Detective Peterson? In Liz’s part, he’s about to pump Jaya! I wanted to hear more about his cock sliding into her hot and wet tunnel of deception. And the Cops? I’m sure the female one had handcuffs? What happened to Jameson Jeeves? Did he go on break? They all had so much potential, yet you fumbled it. Plus, who hid the Queen’s Royal Glockenspiel in the bedroom wall? Most importantly, why is the French chef, speaking Italian? Just too many plot holes. It’s almost as if, when you wrote Part 17, you weren’t even considering there would ever be a Part 23? I almost forgot. David? Who names a dachshund David?”
“The Queen’s Royal Glockenspiel was hid in the wall almost four years ago, by a deaf and disgruntled dry-waller and part-time traveling musician named Giuseppe. He’d lost all of his retirement money on bit-coin. That Glockenspiel was to be his future, dammit! Until he got run over by a bus bending down to pick up a dropped crisp and flaky sweet ricotta filled cannoli! A cannoli, dropped there, by David. This would have brought my story full circle, but I felt the overly detailed backstory would have slowed the pace of the sex scenes! I’d hoped this could have developed into a spin-off, but decided to kill poor Giuseppe instead! While I’m at it, I named him David, because the world around him that he battled was his Goliath! Are you happy now?”
“Whoa! Down Zorro, down boy. A hidden religious aspect… I didn’t see that coming at all as part of an Erotic Hundo Expansion. I’m still not sure how you ever got that name? Zorro stood for integrity, and you just keep making shit up.”
“It’s because I pissed in a Z shape as a puppy. What did you think, Butch?”
“I’m very sorry about Giuseppe, but agree with everything Frenchie said. Plus, I’m not comfortable with the main character being a dachshund.”
“I was going to do a Jack Russell Terrier, but that’s been done.”
“Why not go with a bulldog. Bulldogs are very expressive, smart, and handsome.”
“Can’t agree with Butch more, but I think it should be a French bulldog.”
“Why did I ever hire you two? You’re as un-helpful as Eugene and Morris.”
Thanks to Skylar Quinn, Sunny A Morgan & Crush Publications for the Crush Hundo Expansion concept. Having a blast working with Liz Edon, Steve, Vivienne Hawthorn, Suzy Vella, Harlot O Scara, Agent Ranch Hand (Ranch), JA Martin, F. Leonora Solomon, Maia Woodhouse, and I’m sure anyone else who decides to jump in and “Expand With Us”.
Up for a Zatanna Dark Writer’s Challenge? If only I knew some Creative and Naughty writers on Medium??? Hmmm….
