Summary

A narrator on a train observes a girl being bothered by another passenger, intervenes subtly, and is thanked with a smile.

Abstract

On a warm, sunny day in the city, amidst the hustle and bustle, a narrator aboard a train finds solace in watching a beautiful girl engrossed in her phone. As the train moves, the cool breeze plays with her hair, and she tucks it behind her ear, only for the wind to be mischievous again. The narrator enjoys this silent entertainment until the girl notices the gaze and conveys discomfort with a pointed look. The narrator then admires the scenery outside, but the mind wanders back to the girl. When the narrator notices a man staring at her, they feel protective and intervene by standing between them, causing the man to look away. The girl thanks the narrator with a smile. The narrator seeks feedback on their story, expressing a desire to improve their writing.

Opinions

The narrator finds joy in the simple act of observing others, particularly the girl on the train.
The narrator respects the girl's discomfort and quickly diverts their gaze when she notices.
There is an internal conflict within the narrator, torn between the desire to look at the girl again and the heart's uncertainty.
The narrator takes a silent stand against harassment by positioning themselves between the girl and the man, showing a commitment to protecting others.
The narrator values the girl's reaction to their intervention, taking her smile and eye blink as a sign of gratitude.
The narrator is open to constructive criticism, inviting readers to share their thoughts to enhance their storytelling skills.

A Girl in Train

Journey just started….

warm day, sunny weather

in the city, new faces

tired, stress on it,

saw a smile of a beautiful girl,

busy on phone, texting with someone maybe,

moving train, cool breeze disturbing her open hair,

she tucked hair behind the ear,

wind is being naughty and again hairs on her face,

watching all this, I am happy as its entertaining,

she noticed after a moment and gave a look on me,

it's enough to understand that look around not me.

My eyes diverted on trees seems moving outside,

Greenfields with corps, animals grazing

Naughty mind again wants to see her one time sure,

but my heart still not sure,

Intentions were pure, found no cure,

neck rotate around ninety degrees,

this time she looks uneasy, smile was not on the face,

the guy was staring at her, not moving an inch,

I feel bad for her and angry with an arrogant guy,

No fight, no loud voices I use,

I move and stand between them,

Now, guy understand the situation, looking around

One more time, she looked at me,

and smile is back on her face,

Thanked me with blink her eyes.

#StoryEnd

This time, I tried something new and different. Please leave your responses. It will help me to know to make it better or try something else.

Vicky Jangra